Sunday, January 16, 2011

Strat41: Headlines

Up and down season continues for Florida by Pat Dooley, Gainesville Sun
Turbulent is simply the definition of up and down. But I think its usage truly provides the notion that the UF men’s basketball season is struggling with consistency.
I would change this to: Turbulent season continues for Florida

Gun goes off in Walmart; man arrested by Cindy Swirko, Gainesville Sun
The story is about a gun going off accidentally in Walmart. No one was injured and that should be addressed more so than the owner being arrested.
I would change this to: Accidental gunshot in Walmart; no one injured

Gators not intimidated by Vols by Matt Watts, Independent Florida Alligator
Just this simple distinction makes it clear on which set of Gators we are talking about. I think the biggest problem with college sports headlines is that you can never tell which sport is being discussed because team names are always used most of the time.
I would change this to: Gators not intimidated by Lady Vols

1 comment:

  1. OK, but in future elaborate a bit more re instructions from book.